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DALMACIJA:
Thank you comrades.

I also want to hear the opinions of the native speakers at this forum.

I just want to take advantage of this opportunity to learn something new.

DALMACIJA:
All right no further responces???


That means that there aren't much errors in the tekst.

JR-Obilic:
Republic of Serbian Krajina – Government in Exile

This article documents the crimes against the Serbian Orthodox nation and priesthood during the period of the Second World War.

The Government of the Republic of Serbian Krajina in exile is honored to welcome Diplomatic-Consular Departments to the Republic of Serbia in order to inform them of the horrible tortures and murders against Serbian Orthodox priests. These crimes, which took place during World War 2, were committed by the Croatian Ustashi authorities on the territories of today's Croatia and Bosnia and Herzegovina.

The Government of Republic of Serbian Krajina in exile is repeating that these crimes are one of the results of the actions planned by the European colonization powers.  The famous German philosopher Karlhajnc Desner exposed these crimes in one of his books, titled as ”The Politic of the Roman Popes during the 20 Century”. Nations surrounding Serbia (Croatians, Albanians, Serbian Catholics, Serbian Muslims and others) were prepared by these European colonization powers to participate in the extermination of the Serbian Orthodox communities in the Balkans.  The Croatian army was ordered by Croatia's government to fulfill the biological extermination of the Orthodox Serbs on the areas which were controlled by the Croatian Ustashi government. These actions were partially accomplished during WW2.

The following is a highlight of a report made by the Italian military delegation in Belgrade describing atrocities against a number of Serbian Orthodox priests.  The report is additionally confirmed and signed by Luidji Bonfat and by Domeniko Dal Faso.  Sadly, there were many more victims which have been forgotten.

Protocol’s number: 465
Document number: 003

Belgrade, 27 august of 1941

This report is signed and acknowledged by the authorities of the Serbian orthodox church.

Subject: Atrocities of Croatian militaries against the Serbian population in Croatia.

- Voja Vojnovic a Serbian Orthodox priest from Osijek is killed.
- In the river Drava are two bodies of two Serbian Orthodox priests found.
- Prota Zivko Danilovic the former government representative from the town Prijedor is killed.
- Prota Bogdan Banjevic is killed in 19 July near the city of Banja Luka.
- Number 07 Prota Steva Djuricis is killed in the place of Ogulin. Before the murder the Croatian soldiers were cutting the chin and the eyes and were breaking the arms and legs of the man.
- Serbian Orthodox priest form the village Plaski is killed.
- The Serbian Orthodox priest Milan Trsic, from the place Vrlika, was captured (on 10 July) and killed in a Croatian military casern near Knin.
- The Serbian Orthodox Priest Mihajlo Minic, from Valjevo, is killed in Zenica.
- The Serbian Orthodox priest Milos Petrovic from Lucana was killed in Derventa during this attempt to escape.
- The following Serbian Orthodox priests Dusan Bobar, Milos Savic, Janko Savic, Ljubo Jaskic and Drago Makojevic were killed on 22 July in the place Vlasenici.
- Serbian Orthodox priests Borivoje Bozic from Palaca near Vukovar is also murdered. 
- Prota Spiro Starovic from Brcko is killed.
- Prota Vida Visnjevac from Gacka who was ill was throwed out of his bed and killed together with Porta Starovic.
- Gvozdenovic and Vujovis from Mostar - Murdered.
- Kaludjer Deretic and Monastirlic from Ljubinja (Hercegovina) - Assassinated.
- Serbian Orthodox priest Bogunovic from Donji Lapac is killed together with his wife and two children. Their bodies were throwed in a pit between Donji Lapac and Boridjevca where other Serbs were also thrown.

The government of the Republic of Serbian Krajina in exile is calling out the countries and nations who have also faced prosecution at the hands of the extended nazi regime.   We will appreciate your assistance in bringing the issue of the genocide against the Serbian people in front of the UN.

JR-Obilic:
That's a few things fixed although i would definitelly go over it more.  What exactly are u using this for?

It gets confusing at some points like when u start listing the names of people who have been killed its kind of unorganized and if your gonna quote another aticle it has to be more clear, and u should include the other article otherwise people will get confused. 

Also if your gonna discuss the crimes against the priesthood you should definitelly tie that into the crimes against the population a bit more since over 500 000 serbian people were killed.  So if i were you i'd probly take away the list of names and just add to that aspect of it.  Although you should definitelly highlight the crimes aagainst the church.  You also need to clearly highlight the connection between the Croats and the Nazis.

I like to  see this kind of work though.  Once u finalize it and im not as stoned as i am right now i will go over it more.  Good idea with the article.  Keep it up!   O0

DALMACIJA:
Brate JR- Obilic,

Yes, I was looking for those kind of corrections which are provided now by you!

My compliments. You speak like a native. I am surprised.
I must say that you really control the English language on a high level.

This article is a translation of a Serbian article.
Which was written by the members of the Serbian Republic of Krajina’s government in exile.

I am translating a couple of those articles for them.
From Serbian into English. The members of RSK’s government will distribute the translations.

Your brains are really Serbian, thank you again.
This is important. 

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