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Offline Hail Columbia

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Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« on: November 05, 2007, 09:42:12 PM »
I started writing it last month, and I finished almost all of it a couple of weeks later.  The name of the woman in question is left blank, since I have yet to find that special woman.

It is set to this tune: http://www.konzulatsfrj.com/HejSloveni.mp3

Who's that woman with that orange hair
And a complexion so fair?
I don't know how to talk to her,
But I do know that I love her.

She has seen me, the words escape me
I'm unable to express my feelings.
|: Oh, how I wish to say, then
To this young maiden
I love you, ___ :|


How did these feelings come across me?
I see her, and I feel weak.
Is this true love, or a fantasy
In the midst of a daydream?

Will she reject me, detest me
If to her, I express my feelings?
|: When shall come the day,
When I have the courage to say,
I love you, ___ :|


It's my hope to the Almighty Lord
That I get to see her more
The way she looks completely stuns me
But I love her demeanor the most.

Are we meant to be, the words come to me,
I pray that such is our destiny
|: Now I can finally say,
From my lips to her face,
I love you, ___ :|
« Last Edit: November 15, 2007, 08:59:43 PM by Hail Columbia »


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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #1 on: November 05, 2007, 10:12:13 PM »
I started writing it last month, and I finished almost all of it a couple of weeks later.  The name of the woman in question is left blank, since I have yet to find that special woman.

It is set to this tune: http://www.konzulatsfrj.com/HejSloveni.mp3

Who's that woman with that orange hair
And a complexion so fair?
I don't know how to talk to her,
But I do know that I love her.

She has seen me, the words escape me
I'm unable to express my feelings.
|: Oh, how I wish to say, then
To this young maiden
I love you, ___ :|


How did these feelings come across me?
I see her, and I feel weak.
Is this true love, or a fantasy
In the middle of a daydream?

Will she reject me, detest me
If to her, I express my feelings?
|: When shall come the day,
When I have the courage to say,
I love you, ___ :|


It's my hope to the Almighty Lord
That I get to see her more
The way she looks completely stuns me
But I love her demeanor the most.

Are we meant to be, the words come to me,
I pray that such is our destiny
|: Now I can finally say,
From my lips to her face,
I love you, ___ :|
Don't quit your day Job!
« Last Edit: November 05, 2007, 10:34:42 PM by maryjoe »

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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #2 on: November 06, 2007, 06:14:49 AM »
Dude ...I hope you didnt show this to your crush. If you did then its more likley for Hillary to nuke Iran than for this girl to ever date you.
"We are in 1938, and Iran is Germany"


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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #3 on: November 06, 2007, 07:23:15 AM »
I agree with Mills, Hail its very nice and I am sure the girl will love it. Just make sure she has red hair.  ;)

I think if a man gone to the effort of creating something special for a woman it should be treasured.

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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #4 on: November 06, 2007, 07:57:49 AM »
I agree with Mills, Hail its very nice and I am sure the girl will love it. Just make sure she has red hair.  ;)

I think if a man gone to the effort of creating something special for a woman it should be treasured.
Nicely put Infidel.  I agree with Mills and The Infidel  O0 HailColumbia
Be very CAREFUL of people whose WORDS don't match their ACTIONS.

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« Reply #5 on: November 06, 2007, 09:18:52 AM »
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I agree with Mills, Hail its very nice and I am sure the girl will love it. Just make sure she has red hair.  Wink

I think if a man gone to the effort of creating something special for a woman it should be treasured.

Noooooooooooo

You are coming off too heavily. And by the looks of it you are giving your respect away and you don't even know her. She has to earn it first. Don't be a love sick puppy.

Take my advice: have a chat with her and ask for her phone number. Wait 5 days and give her a ring and ask her out to Starbucks for a coffee during the week. Save the "special stuff" for when you are married.

If you need any advice in dating ask Merkava aka Dr.Love 
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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #6 on: November 06, 2007, 09:50:37 AM »
I started writing it last month, and I finished almost all of it a couple of weeks later.  The name of the woman in question is left blank, since I have yet to find that special woman.

It is set to this tune: http://www.konzulatsfrj.com/HejSloveni.mp3

Who's that woman with that orange hair
And a complexion so fair?
I don't know how to talk to her,
But I do know that I love her.

She has seen me, the words escape me
I'm unable to express my feelings.
|: Oh, how I wish to say, then
To this young maiden
I love you, ___ :|


How did these feelings come across me?
I see her, and I feel weak.
Is this true love, or a fantasy
In the middle of a daydream?

Will she reject me, detest me
If to her, I express my feelings?
|: When shall come the day,
When I have the courage to say,
I love you, ___ :|


It's my hope to the Almighty Lord
That I get to see her more
The way she looks completely stuns me
But I love her demeanor the most.

Are we meant to be, the words come to me,
I pray that such is our destiny
|: Now I can finally say,
From my lips to her face,
I love you, ___ :|
Don't quit your day Job!

What the hell, lady!!!!!  >:( >:( >:(

Shame on you! You come here, and say to this great man, that his literature is nothing special?!! >:(

 >:(........................................................................... >:( , you make me sick mary!

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That's a beautiful poem Hail O0

You are going to make some lady a veeeeery happy lady some day, G-D willing - in the near future. G-D has a plan for you  :)

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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #7 on: November 06, 2007, 09:53:35 AM »
Its a great poem...

I just think he is coming too heavy too soon. Writing sweet poems may work in Hollywood. But its the streets out here and dating is a jungle. Its just like war. You have to plan your love campaign smartly.

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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #8 on: November 06, 2007, 10:04:06 AM »
Great poem Hail Columbia
Thy destroyers and they that make thee waste shall go forth of thee.  Isaiah 49:17

 
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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #9 on: November 06, 2007, 02:50:15 PM »
Its a really sweet poem but I agree with merkava.

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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #10 on: November 06, 2007, 04:27:51 PM »
I started writing it last month, and I finished almost all of it a couple of weeks later.  The name of the woman in question is left blank, since I have yet to find that special woman.

It is set to this tune: http://www.konzulatsfrj.com/HejSloveni.mp3

Who's that woman with that orange hair
And a complexion so fair?
I don't know how to talk to her,
But I do know that I love her.

She has seen me, the words escape me
I'm unable to express my feelings.
|: Oh, how I wish to say, then
To this young maiden
I love you, ___ :|


How did these feelings come across me?
I see her, and I feel weak.
Is this true love, or a fantasy
In the middle of a daydream?

Will she reject me, detest me
If to her, I express my feelings?
|: When shall come the day,
When I have the courage to say,
I love you, ___ :|


It's my hope to the Almighty Lord
That I get to see her more
The way she looks completely stuns me
But I love her demeanor the most.

Are we meant to be, the words come to me,
I pray that such is our destiny
|: Now I can finally say,
From my lips to her face,
I love you, ___ :|
Don't quit your day Job!

What the hell, lady!!!!!  >:( >:( >:(

Shame on you! You come here, and say to this great man, that his literature is nothing special?!! >:(

 >:(........................................................................... >:( , you make me sick mary!

---

That's a beautiful poem Hail O0

You are going to make some lady a veeeeery happy lady some day, G-D willing - in the near future. G-D has a plan for you  :)
Get a life MORON!
« Last Edit: November 06, 2007, 04:35:59 PM by maryjoe »

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« Reply #11 on: November 06, 2007, 04:29:25 PM »
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Get a life MORAN!
Its Moron !
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« Reply #12 on: November 06, 2007, 04:30:24 PM »
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Get a life MORAN!
Its Moron !
Thank you!

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« Reply #13 on: November 06, 2007, 04:37:04 PM »
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I agree with Mills, Hail its very nice and I am sure the girl will love it. Just make sure she has red hair.  Wink

I think if a man gone to the effort of creating something special for a woman it should be treasured.

Noooooooooooo


Yeeeeeeeees, my fella wrote poems to me very early in the relationship, its one of the sweetest thing he could of done.  ;)

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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #14 on: November 06, 2007, 04:39:23 PM »
Maryjoe its you who clearly needs to get a life.

Or a man!

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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #15 on: November 06, 2007, 04:51:07 PM »
There is no question that maryjoe is a troll, who has nothing productive to contribute here.


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Did our fathers build of old;
Strengthen then, O Lord, their children
To defend, to love, to hold
That the heritage they gave us
For our children yet may be:
Bondsmen only to the Highest
And before the whole world free.
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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #16 on: November 06, 2007, 04:57:09 PM »
There is no question that maryjoe is a troll, who has nothing productive to contribute here.
I'm sorry Columbia but I really think your poem stinks. if you want to ban me for that go right ahead

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« Reply #17 on: November 06, 2007, 06:19:16 PM »
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Yeeeeeeeees, my fella wrote poems to me very early in the relationship, its one of the sweetest thing he could of done.
Interesting. Whats is your relationship like now if I may ask?

I'm sorry Columbia but I really think your poem stinks. if you want to ban me for that go right ahead
Why does it stink ? If you don't have anything nice to say don't say anything at all. I think its a great poem. Don't ban her. Add her to our singles profiles under "desperately seeking man"
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« Reply #18 on: November 06, 2007, 06:26:41 PM »
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Yeeeeeeeees, my fella wrote poems to me very early in the relationship, its one of the sweetest thing he could of done.
Interesting. Whats is your relationship like now if I may ask?


I am going to marry him  :) :laugh:

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« Reply #19 on: November 06, 2007, 06:30:34 PM »
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Yeeeeeeeees, my fella wrote poems to me very early in the relationship, its one of the sweetest thing he could of done.
Interesting. Whats is your relationship like now if I may ask?


I am going to marry him  :) :laugh:

Congrats.

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« Reply #20 on: November 06, 2007, 06:43:06 PM »
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I am going to marry him
Congrats !!! Well done.

If your future husband told you: "honey....we need some money and we need to rob the bank tomorrow" what would you say?
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« Reply #21 on: November 06, 2007, 07:05:27 PM »
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Yeeeeeeeees, my fella wrote poems to me very early in the relationship, its one of the sweetest thing he could of done.
Interesting. Whats is your relationship like now if I may ask?


I am going to marry him  :) :laugh:

Congrats.

Thank you Sarah

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« Reply #22 on: November 06, 2007, 07:06:32 PM »
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I am going to marry him
Congrats !!! Well done.

If your future husband told you: "honey....we need some money and we need to rob the bank tomorrow" what would you say?

Give me the keys I am driving  :::D

And thank you for the congrats.  :)

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« Reply #23 on: November 06, 2007, 07:10:28 PM »
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Give me the keys I am driving
Great stuff ...souns like he has really won you heart. No worries , I am happy for you !

I must admit you are one of the few exceptions - in 99.9% of the cases writing a sweet poem leads to failure. Specially if the woman is a knock out.

So back to the topic. Hail Columbia if you wanna win this lady over you need:
1) Confidence
2) You need to be a Challenge
3) You will need Self Control
4) You will need a great sense of humour

 :)
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Re: Here's a little poem that I wrote:
« Reply #24 on: November 06, 2007, 07:13:03 PM »
Thanks for the advice, Merkava.  I'll keep that in mind when I hit the bar Thursday night.


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In thy power Almighty, trusting,
Did our fathers build of old;
Strengthen then, O Lord, their children
To defend, to love, to hold
That the heritage they gave us
For our children yet may be:
Bondsmen only to the Highest
And before the whole world free.
As our fathers trusted humbly,
Teach us, Lord, to trust Thee still:
Guard our land and guide our people
In Thy way to do Thy will.